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write about modern technology and how it affects uch as personal computers and the internet ,have made it possible for many people to do their work from home ,illustrate the advantages and disadvanteges with examples not less than 250 words

#technology #uch #computers #internet #people #work #home #disadvanteges
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Today Modern technology,
such
 as personal computers and the
internet
 ,
have
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 made it possible for many people to do their work from home .
this
have
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 a lot of advantages like saving
time
 and
money
 .
In Addition
 , in being more efficient .
On the other hand
its
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it's
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 less
safety
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safe
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. Computers and modern technology saved a lot of
time
 and
money
 due to
the
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 fast pace of it .
On the other hand
 , It saved for
companies
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companies'
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 office appliances ,desks , office
rents
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, and all other needs employers needed
time
 ago . Plus, saved
time
 from work to home and the other way around .
On the other hand
 , it saved tons of
money
 for employers to invest
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is
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 other business aspects.
Nevertheless
, it made us more efficient in communicating
between
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with
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 each other in completing our daily tasks
instead
 of using the fax machine and the
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postman
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post man
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postman
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 like we used to do thirty years ago.
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Similarly
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Similarly
, depending on
internet
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the internet
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 made our world a small people can communicate in
efficiency
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efficiently
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 and transparent than before .
On the
contrary
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 there are some disadvantages as well.
For instance
 ,
the
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apply
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cyber security is not
garuanted
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guaranteed
from
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by
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 hackers everywhere.
Also
 , if the system or the
internet
 is down for any reason , life will be paralyzed
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immediately
immediatly
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immediately
. To sum up , modern technology and the
internet
 did make our life
more
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easier , saved
time
 ,
money
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and money
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 and
became
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 more efficient and productive . But, we cannot ignore as well the cyber security point of view.
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