Many museums charge for admission while others are free. do you think the advantages of charging people to museums outweighs the disadvantages.

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While some
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consider paying a
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to gain access
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the
museum
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as a good
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, other
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people
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think
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. In my opinion, I believe other
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the benefits of paying an entrance
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which
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, an opportunity to get money to maintain the facility and the value
people
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place on the time spent touring the
museum
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, are more than the drawbacks.
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with, getting funds to keep the
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in good form is one reason why paying charges to enter the
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is beneficial.
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, maintaining these facilities
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artefacts are kept requires
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of money. These monies can be sourced from the gate fees visitors pay to help keep the
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running.
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, the great Ulster
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's manager claimed that the revenue gotten from tickets purchased by visitors helped them to pay the bills of the
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facility. Another reason why charging an entry
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at the
museum
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is advantageous is that it helps visitors to place more value on the time spent touring the facility.
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means that when
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pay for something, they are more likely to make the most of it and
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helps them to get fully involved in understanding the various stories and themes behind the items displayed at the
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than if
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the
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paid no fees.
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, the
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in my country has the car of the assassinated president,
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and paying
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a gate
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enabled me to concentrate
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all the details of the events around the assassination during the tour. In conclusion, I believe the benefits of paying entry fees to gain entrance into the
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which includes the sourcing of running costs and helping
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visitor
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to
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place value on tour time are more than the disadvantages.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Admission fee
  • Revenue stream
  • Maintenance
  • Overcrowding
  • Commercialization
  • Cultural heritage
  • Diverse attendance
  • Community ownership
  • Access to culture
  • Visitor experience
  • Exhibit quality
  • Cultural mission
  • Reliance on funding
  • Government subsidies
  • Cultural accessibility
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