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The mass media ,including television ,radio and newspaper have great influence in shaping people's idea. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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It is thought by many that the
mass
media
, including television, radio and newspaper have immense influence over the ideas of
people
. There is an undeniable element of truth to that statement
however
 I believe that
people
's ideas are
also
 shaped by a great host of things
such
 as their environment and their cultural and religious backgrounds. The influence of
mass
media
 has
well
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been recognised for years as a source of impacting the opinions of the general public. Companies and advertising agencies compete for slots on television, radio, newspapers and in the modern day, spaces on social
media
 platforms .They use a host of marketing and advertising techniques in order to sell their products to the masses by showcasing these products through these avenues. It has been recognised that products used by celebrities and social
media
 influencers sell out almost immediately and
this
 has given rise to the careers of social
media
 influencers .
Mass
media
 is
also
 used to convey political and ideological messages to the public in the modern day
as well as
 in previous times. Propaganda and messaging are spread through
media
 to sway public opinion.
however
,
people
 are
also
 greatly influenced by their own beliefs and backgrounds including cultural and religious beliefs that they have held on to for years. Religions have been spread across the world without the help of
media
 but through other avenues
such
 as oral tradition. Cultural practices have been passed down from generation to generation without the help of
mass
media
 and folklore dances
and
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traditional clothing and other cultural regalia have survived the test of time . In conclusion ,
mass
media
 has an undeniable impact on
people
's views
however
 humans are very complex beings who are influenced by a host of things not limited to the
media
.
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