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Government should put taxes on unhealthy food so that people eat healthy food. Do you agree or disagree?

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Some
people
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 believe that the government should
tax
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 unhealthy
foods
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 so that the public
eat
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eats
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 healthier
foods
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.
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 some
people
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 believe that raising the cost of unhealthy food may deter consumers from buying these
foods
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 and encourage them to eat healthier others say that those who do not wish to make lifestyle changes will not be deterred by the cost. In countries where sugar
tax
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 has been introduced some companies opted to pay the
tax
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 themselves allowing the public to purchase the products at the original costs
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 undeterred by
tax
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 increases. Other individuals are willing to pay the required costs in order to eat or drink their preferred
foods
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 . Organic and healthy
foods
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 are in general more expensive than their unhealthy counterparts and
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 has forced
people
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 who are not able to afford the healthier options to purchase cheaper , unhealthier, processed and sugary
foods
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. The availability of cheaper organic and healthy options would do more in increasing the likelihood of
people
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 eating healthier
foods
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 than taxing unhealthy
foods
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. Parents and guardians who would like to give their children healthier food options but are unable to afford the costly healthy and organic
foods
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 would be more inclined to buy healthier meals if they were as widely available and less costly. In conclusion, I believe that greater education about health and nutrition would be the best way to encourage healthy eating followed by the availability of affordable healthy food
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 to taxing unhealthy
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 which I do not think will greatly impact attitudes toward healthy eating.
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