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Government should put taxes on unhealthy food so that people eat healthy food. Do you agree or disagree?

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Some
people
 believe that the government should
tax
 unhealthy
foods
 so that the public
eat
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eats
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 healthier
foods
.
Although
 some
people
 believe that raising the cost of unhealthy food may deter consumers from buying these
foods
 and encourage them to eat healthier others say that those who do not wish to make lifestyle changes will not be deterred by the cost. In countries where sugar
tax
 has been introduced some companies opted to pay the
tax
 themselves allowing the public to purchase the products at the original costs
therefore
 undeterred by
tax
 increases. Other individuals are willing to pay the required costs in order to eat or drink their preferred
foods
 . Organic and healthy
foods
 are in general more expensive than their unhealthy counterparts and
this
 has forced
people
 who are not able to afford the healthier options to purchase cheaper , unhealthier, processed and sugary
foods
. The availability of cheaper organic and healthy options would do more in increasing the likelihood of
people
 eating healthier
foods
 than taxing unhealthy
foods
. Parents and guardians who would like to give their children healthier food options but are unable to afford the costly healthy and organic
foods
 would be more inclined to buy healthier meals if they were as widely available and less costly. In conclusion, I believe that greater education about health and nutrition would be the best way to encourage healthy eating followed by the availability of affordable healthy food
in contrast
 to taxing unhealthy
foods
 which I do not think will greatly impact attitudes toward healthy eating.
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