Many people say that universities should only offer places to young students with the highest marks, while others say they should accept people of all ages, even if they did not do well at school. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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that universities should only offer spots to young
students
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the highest marks, but some
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others say that they should accept
people
of all ages, even
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of
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they did not do well at
school
.
This
essay will delve into both sides of the argument and correspondingly will shed light on my opinion in the conclusion.
To begin
with,
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a student
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student
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with the highest points should be offered placements in their preferred choice. Institutes should offer
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admission
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university
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to other applicants.
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, in prestigious colleges,
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students
who have strong academic
background
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should be given a spot in their preferred courses
instead
of
offering
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to a rich student who can influence the decision with his money. There are many cases in recent years that many rich parents commit
admission
fraud to get their babies into
college
.
Thus
, it is an unfair
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.
Additionally
, many universities deliberately only admit
students
with good scores to boost their
college
image
. They use
this
tactic to create niche educational
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to attract funding from many businesses.
For instance
, MIT only enrols A-grand
students
, to reflect their positive
image
to companies like Google and IBM to receive funding for their departments.
Hence
, a reputed
image
of the
college
results
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fundings
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.
On the other hand
, many
people
thinks
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that
college
enrolment should be
opened
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to everyone. All
students
should have a chance of getting into their chosen
college
course.
For instance
, universities like IBA take
admission
tests for
admission
, so it gives some chances for all
students
to get into
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college
regardless of their high
school
results. As there can be many reasons for children not to perform well in any particular
school
year, these results should not come
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their way to jeopardize their future prospects.
Similarly
, sometimes due to financial or domestic issues, some
people
can not continue their
further
studies. Many drops out of
school
to ensure they can support their families financially.
For example
, research shows many teenagers who
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to low-income houses
drops
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out of
school
to support their families. In conclusion, I believe a
college
education should not be treated as a
college
only for
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rich
people
. Everyone should deserve a chance to obtain a good education.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • merit-based
  • competitive environment
  • academic standards
  • innovation
  • diversity
  • mature students
  • equitable
  • inclusive admission policies
  • educational disadvantages
  • holistic admission process
  • extracurricular achievements
  • non-traditional students
  • equal opportunities
  • societal progress
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