Many people say that universities should only offer places to young students with the highest marks, while others say they should accept people of all ages, even if they did not do well at school. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Many
people
thinks
that universities should only offer spots to young Change the verb form
think
students
who has
the highest marks, but some Correct subject-verb agreement
have
of
Change preposition
apply
the
others say that they should accept Correct article usage
apply
people
of all ages, even Correct your spelling
if
of
they did not do well at Correct your spelling
if
school
. This
essay will delve into both sides of the argument and correspondingly will shed light on my opinion in the conclusion.
To begin
with, Add an article
a student
the student
student
with the highest points should be offered placements in their preferred choice. Institutes should offer Fix the agreement mistake
students
there
Replace the word
their
admission
in
university Change preposition
to
compares
to other applicants. Wrong verb form
compared
For example
, in prestigious colleges, the
Correct article usage
apply
students
who have strong academic background
should be given a spot in their preferred courses Fix the agreement mistake
backgrounds
instead
of offering
to a rich student who can influence the decision with his money. There are many cases in recent years that many rich parents commit Wrong verb form
offered
admission
fraud to get their babies into college
. Thus
, it is an unfair practise
. Replace the word
practice
Additionally
, many universities deliberately only admit students
with good scores to boost their college
image
. They use this
tactic to create niche educational institute
to attract funding from many businesses. Fix the agreement mistake
institutes
For instance
, MIT only enrols A-grand students
, to reflect their positive image
to companies like Google and IBM to receive funding for their departments. Hence
, a reputed image
of the college
results image
Change preposition
in image
fundings
.
Fix the agreement mistake
funding
On the other hand
, many people
thinks
that Change the verb form
think
college
enrolment should be opened
to everyone. All Replace the word
open
students
should have a chance of getting into their chosen college
course. For instance
, universities like IBA take admission
tests for admission
, so it gives some chances for all students
to get into the
Correct article usage
apply
college
regardless of their high school
results. As there can be many reasons for children not to perform well in any particular school
year, these results should not come in
their way to jeopardize their future prospects. Change preposition
apply
Similarly
, sometimes due to financial or domestic issues, some people
can not continue their further
studies. Many drops out of school
to ensure they can support their families financially. For example
, research shows many teenagers who belongs
to low-income houses Correct subject-verb agreement
belong
drops
out of Correct subject-verb agreement
drop
school
to support their families.
In conclusion, I believe a college
education should not be treated as a college
only for the
rich Correct article usage
apply
people
. Everyone should deserve a chance to obtain a good education.Submitted by trancaomaitrang on
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