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In order to solve traffics, governments should tax private car owners heavily and use the money to improve public transportation. What are the advantages and disadvantages of such a solution?

To rectify
the
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vehicle congestion, authorities should make a law to give huge
tax
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taxes
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 to the
car
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 owners and disburse the collection to improve
the
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mass transit.
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to
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the
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car
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 owners. The two main advantages of
this
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 solution are a large number of society will only own one
car
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instead
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 of two or three
cars
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 and
maximum
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 number of
population
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the population
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 will use public transport .
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, implementing
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 will reduce traffic
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 the road by almost half because many people will sell their
second
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 vehicle and retain only one vehicle.
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, a fraction of the society who uses their own
car
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 to go somewhere will use buses and trains to cover their distance.
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, in 2005 South Korea pass
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 law that
car
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owner
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owners
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 will pay 70% extra of
its
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 original price so after
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 traffic issues
are automatically resolve
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.
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On
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 of the main disadvantage of
this
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 solution is that many
car
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manufacturers
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manufacturers'
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 market shares will decrease due to low
sell
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 and they will
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shut down
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shutdown
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shut down
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 their manufacturing
plant
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plants
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 and
country
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the country
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 losses its economy.
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in
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last
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 year in Pakistan government impose Hugh taxes on buying
cars
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 so a lot of people stop purchasing
cars
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 and due to
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this companies
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this company
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 like Toyota & Suzuki
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shut down
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shutdown
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shut down
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 their manufacturing plants for 30 days. In conclusion, imposing
heavy
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fine
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fines
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 on
cars
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 owner will give
country
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the country
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 a gorgeous mass transit and traffic issues will resolve.
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,
government
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the government
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 will
loss
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 in the economy due to
closure
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the closure
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 of
car
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 manufacturer giants.

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