Today people are surrounded by advertising. This affects what people think is important and has a negative impact on people’s lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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in today's modern world, advancement in technology development has provided many ways to marketers of promoting their products and services to the general public.

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ads

, and online

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on video streaming websites, these

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are clutter everywhere which ultimately leads to a negative impact on behaviour and our mindset.

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with, the advertiser usually promotes consumerism, which anchors on buying frequently. we are always told to buy new clothes

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and stay trendy, or we won't look cool without buying the latest iPhone. These advertisements create a habit that negatively affects individual financial status.

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, They use stereotypes, Through advertising, they create a feeling toward how a certain group of people should look like.

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, beauty creams tailored towards women, try to project the white colour of a woman as superior to the other colour, and women must accept

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projection that the media portrays and consider

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as having higher status.

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, mind cluttering everywhere you see you may find an advertisement. In current times people desire to make their

life

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as simple as possible, but

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factor, we have to process thousands of information daily.

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, misleading, companies often make products look amazing through their advertising design and stories. But in reality, it doesn't perform as described in the

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, adverts generally create low self-esteem by manipulating thoughts and

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persuading you to buy products that will make you happy.

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, in my opinion, advertising negatively

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our mental health and sometimes gives us a financial dent.

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people

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blindly

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the trends without thinking about their consequences

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1Word repetition
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Relevant & specific examples

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Today people are surrounded by advertising. This affects what people think is important and has a negative impact on people’s lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

crimes by minors on the rise in recent times. the psychologists claim that the fundamental reason for this is that children these days are lacking the social and emotional learning they need from parents and teachers to what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In some country, health care is free, paid for by the state. In other countries, payment is divided between the state and people themselves.

Some people think that the new houses should be built in the same style as older houses in the local areas. Others disagree and say that local authorities should allow people to built houses in the styles of their own choice. Discuss both views and give your opinion.