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You live in a room in college which you share with another student. However there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult work. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In the letter describe the situation explain your problems and why it is difficult to work say what kind of accommodation you would prefer

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to let you know that am unhappy with my current living conditions. While the accommodation itself is fine, my
housemate
 has become intolerable making it almost impossible for me to work. hope you will consider my situation favourably. Let me explain my situation. The trouble started about three months ago when my
housemate
first
 moved in. Prior to that, everything was fine; my old
housemate
 was extremely considerate. My current
housemate
,
however
, stays up almost all night and plays incessantly loud music.
As a result
, have not been able to sleep properly as well as
therefore
 cannot concentrate on my studies. Would you kindly transfer me or my
housemate
 to another room? would much prefer to live with someone who is quieter and more considerate of others. As long as it is quiet, I don't mind whom I live with. Thank you for your consideration. Yours faithfully, John Brown
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I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accommodation officer
  • roommate
  • share a room
  • living arrangement
  • difficult to work
  • noise levels
  • study environment
  • privacy concerns
  • alternative accommodation
  • single room
  • academic performance
  • well-being
  • respectfully request
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