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In some countries, disabled people have to face a lot of troubles to access public and private facilities. What solution do you have to help such people?

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Nowadays,
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people
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their talents. There is no doubt that
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 individual has to
face
 lots of challenges in government and private organization
of
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 most
of
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the
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countries. In
this
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about
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the problems
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specially-abled
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 person faces and will provide possible solutions for those problems.
To begin
 with, the major challenge
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 person has to
face
 when they step outside of their house, there
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 few roads and
transports
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transport
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 which are
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people
 friendly. So,
government
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 has to take initiative to build the ideal road and footpath structure for them, and buses should lower their footstep and introduce special sits for them. On top of that,
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policy makers
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policymakers
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 can provide
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 on their tickets.
Additionally
,
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peopre
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people
 are not only those who use
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a wheelchair
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wheelchair
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wheelchairs
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 but
also
people
 with
vision
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a vision
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problem
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, hearing and speech
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, and
with
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other chronic diseases.
Therefore
,
some times
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 these disabilities are not visible, so they are unable to draw special attention towards them. It is quite clear that
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child
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a child
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 with special abilities has to
face
 countless disadvantages in school. To solve
this
 problem, school authorities should provide toilet facilities which will be as per their need. School
administratives
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administrative
 have to take proper care regarding their learning by providing special attention and ideal audio-visual aids.
Besides
, old and new buildings should build
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 friendly entrance, lift and proper sitting space for them. To sum up,
although
 there are lots of challenges
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people
 have to
face
everyday
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, nations are evolving
everyday
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 and introducing infrastructures for differently abled
people
, it is
no
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 far that
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person
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people
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 can
also
 reach their fullest capabilities.
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