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In some cultures, children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough. What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message?

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It is common in some cultures that people tell children that they can gain anything they want if they have enough struggle. I think it has both sides of merits and demerits and I will explain them in the following essay. Nowadays, in
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she should be so industrious to gain
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her
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his goals and it is true in every aspect of today’s life.
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, if a kid wants to go to
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he should struggle hard to increase her
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his scores to be able to be accepted in that school.
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, if a youth does not use to be a hard-working person in her
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his childhood, she
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he cannot be a successful person in the future in some situations that need struggling.
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, if we always tell kids that they will achieve everything they want just by trying hard, they become so depressed in the situations that they could not achieve them and they think that they did not struggle hard enough.
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, we know in some situations, “trying hard” is not the only determining factor.
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, some of the children are sports enthusiasts and it is obvious that they want to be the winner in the competitions; but sometimes they cannot outweigh it and become
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. In
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he has a better tool. (in some cases like bicycle competitions).
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struggling for gaining
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goals, we put the child in an illogical situation in some cases and it bothers them a lot. In conclusion, we should teach children that it is crucial for them to work hard on their wanted goals to achieve them, but it is necessary to notice that we should aware
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that hard trying is not the one and only factor to achieve
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anything they want.

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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • achieve
  • try hard
  • positive mindset
  • self-belief
  • motivates
  • ambitious goals
  • resilience
  • determination
  • confidence
  • self-esteem
  • growth mindset
  • unrealistic expectations
  • disappointment
  • failure
  • effort
  • hard work
  • seek support
  • individual differences
  • abilities
  • capabilities
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