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Your friend has been offered a place on a course at the university where you studied. He/she would like your advice about finding a place to live. Writr an letter to your friend. In your letter Describe where you would lived when you were a student at the university. Recommend the best what from him/her to look accommodation. Warn him/her of mistakes students make when choosing accommodation.

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Dear Praneeth, I am happy to hear from you, I am all right and I hope you are doing well too. I am writing
this
 letter to let you know that I found a job which matches your skill set the role is titled 'Business Intelligence Developer' at the Intuit corporation. The responsibilities include building dashboards using Tableau, analysing bugs and transforming data tables using Alteryx. I am convinced that
this
 is a great opportunity for you as you've completed your
masters
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master's
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 in Computer Science.
Furthermore
, you can find
this
 position online using a website known as Indeed.
Although
 most of the companies need their employees to relocate,
this
 one has an option to work from home which is a huge advantage in your case. I hope
this
 information is helpful and please reach out to me with any
further
 questions. All the best! Sheba.
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Task Achievement
Ensure that your letter closely matches the topic or task given. The provided response seems to have misunderstood the task, which asked for advice about finding accommodation near a university, rather than sharing job opportunities.
Coherence and Cohesion
Use clear and varied sentence structures to improve readability and make your letter more engaging.
Task Achievement
For a higher score, explicitly address all parts of the task, incorporating relevant details to enhance the overall completeness of your response.
Writing Tone
You've successfully adopted a friendly and supportive tone, suitable for writing to a friend. This makes your letter engaging and sincere.
Logical Structure
Your letter is well-structured, with a clear opening, body, and closing, which aids in coherence and maintains the reader's focus throughout the message.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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