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Some people believe that modern technology encourages more sociable behaviour. Others say that this leads to lesser sociable behaviour. Discuss both views with examples and provide your opinion.

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Undoubtedly,
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 is giving
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 new ways to keep in touch with their friends and family through the Internet.
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 phenomenon offers
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 many benefits but brings some disadvantages,
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 as being less social with others. The following paragraphs will analyze both views and give my opinion. On the one hand, the various social media applications,
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, Facebook and Facetime, provide functions that give
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 online chats and interviews.
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 many international students are leaving their own countries to study, they still can use related websites or applications to get in touch with other
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 whom they would love to,
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 they do not stay in the same nation. Anyone won't be limited by time or space; they can easier communicate with others.
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, the negative side,
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 can
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 threaten
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's social skills,
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 as communication and interpersonal skills. The main reason is they do not understand how they do during the conversation. It would cause
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 to give up interacting with each other in real life.
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, it can lead to con-social behaviours in the real world. Another fact can be seen that
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 prefer using electronic products to contact business clients or relatives rather than the face-to-face method because it is more convenient to connect and does not waste time. In conclusion, the changes in
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 are necessary for society; it improves the quality of our life. The most important thing is
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 should know the pros and cons when they use new
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 and remember that new
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 increases the inconvenience issues in our life; it doecannotlve all of the problems we meet.
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