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Making smoking illegal is the best way to protect people from the harmful effects of tobacco. To what extent do you agree or disagree? What other measures do you think might be effective?

#people #effects #tobacco #measures
Some
people
 believe that making a
law
 against smoking is the best way to get
people
 to stop
this
 harmful habit. I don'
t
 agree with
this
. Laws don'
t
 always get
people
 to change their behaviour.
People
 don'
t
 always obey the
law
, especially when the laws are about addictive substances. There are laws against using and selling harmful drugs
such
 as heroin and cocaine, but
people
 still use them. If
people
 really want to do something, they will find a way to do it, whether or not it is against the
law
. Desire, especially when it is for something addictive, is often stronger than the
law
. Education,
on the other hand
, can be very effective. It gives
people
 reasons to want to quit smoking.
People
 need to understand all the harmful effects
this
 bad habit can have on their health. They need to know all the different ways that smoking can affect them.
Then
 they will want to quit smoking because they won'
t
 want to suffer in all these horrible ways.
Besides
 education,
people
also
 need support to quit smoking. It is very hard to quit, even when you really want to, so support is important. There are many health centres that offer programs to help
people
 quit smoking. There are
also
 different methods that
people
 can follow.
In addition
, there are drugs available that make the physical effects of quitting easier to manage. All of these things help support
people
 who are going through the difficult process of quitting smoking.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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