The growing number of overweight people is putting a strain on the health care system in an effort to deal the health-related issues. Some people think that the best way to deal with this problem is to introduce more physical education lessons in the education curriculum. To what extent you agree or disagree?

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obese people is putting
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hospitals in an effort to resolve the diseases
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it. Some citizens think that the optimal way to resolve
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hurdle is to incorporate more physical
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classes in the
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statement because children spend a lot of
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physical activities at
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age and teenagers tend to obey more to their teachers
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amount of
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it is a great opportunity to
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every single day physical
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activities
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to help them to burn fat.
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, if
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practice
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physical
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activities
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five times per
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hour during a
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practice
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sports
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, they might see physical
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as part of the
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curriculum and
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help
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them to continue these
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activities.
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, in The United States, California, starting middle
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, children
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physical
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or P.E. every single day for an hour to help them feel healthier and reduce weight.
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to reduce the statistic of
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overweight
issue
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. Another reason why
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schools
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should support children to reduce weight is that minors tend to obey more their teachers than their
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age some of them feel confused and frustrated.
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not help to find the right
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to
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some
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they get home, they just want to take a rest. As result, if
schools
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support
students
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to
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some type of activities at
school
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, they will follow
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command and these teens might continue in the future
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some type of
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, in California, most
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the
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young adults suffer from
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because twenty years ago,
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did not pay attention
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the importance of
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physical activity, and
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lead
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that many adults dislike
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sports
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facts and strongly believe that the best way to approach
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issue is by implementing more physical
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lessons at
school
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. To conclude, in order to reduce the number of obese people,
schools
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should include more physical
education
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classes as part of their curriculum, and teach
students
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the importance of
practicing
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some type of
sports
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because they listen better to teachers than their
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parents
parets
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peers
.
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will help to avoid putting a strain on the health system.

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