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The growing number of overweight people is putting a strain on the health care system in an effort to deal the health-related issues. Some people think that the best way to deal with this problem is to introduce more physical education lessons in the education curriculum. To what extent you agree or disagree?

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 obese people is putting
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pressure on
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hospitals in an effort to resolve the diseases
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 it. Some citizens think that the optimal way to resolve
this
 hurdle is to incorporate more physical
education
 classes in the
education
 system.
This
 essay strongly agrees with
this
 statement because children spend a lot of
time
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school
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it
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 should
be use
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 to
practice
 physical activities at
early
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 age and teenagers tend to obey more to their teachers
than
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parents
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their parents
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 at home.
Firstly
, teenagers spend
great
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 amount of
time
 at
school
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and
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 it is a great opportunity to
practice
 every single day physical
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activities
activites
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activities
 to help them to burn fat.
Secondly
, if
students
practice
a
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physical
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activities
acitivities
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activities
 five times per
an
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hour during a
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week
weeek
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week
,
this
 could help them to start getting
accostum
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accustom
accosted
 to
practice
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sports
.
Also
, they might see physical
education
 as part of the
school
 curriculum and
this
help
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 them to continue these
sport
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 activities.
For instance
, in The United States, California, starting middle
school
, children
practice
 physical
education
 or P.E. every single day for an hour to help them feel healthier and reduce weight.
This
 has helped
students
 to reduce the statistic of
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overweight
issue
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. Another reason why
the
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schools
 should support children to reduce weight is that minors tend to obey more their teachers than their
parents
 because at
this
 age some of them feel confused and frustrated.
In addition
 to
this
 is that many
students
 have
conflict
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 with their
parents
 and many of them avoid
to talk
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 to them, so
this
 situation
do
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 not help to find the right
time
 to
practice
 some
sports
.
Moreover
, many
parents
 have two
full
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time
 jobs
that
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and
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 by the
time
 they get home, they just want to take a rest. As result, if
schools
 support
students
 to
practice
 some type of activities at
school
, they will follow
teacher's
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 command and these teens might continue in the future
practicing
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 some type of
sports
. To illustrate
this
, in California, most
of
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the
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young adults suffer from
obese
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 because twenty years ago,
schools
 did not pay attention
of
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 the importance of
doing
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physical activity, and
this
lead
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 that many adults dislike
to play
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sports
.
As a result
, hospitals are paying attention to
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 facts and strongly believe that the best way to approach
this
 issue is by implementing more physical
education
 lessons at
school
. To conclude, in order to reduce the number of obese people,
schools
 should include more physical
education
 classes as part of their curriculum, and teach
students
 the importance of
practicing
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 some type of
sports
 because they listen better to teachers than their
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parents
parets
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peers
.
This
 will help to avoid putting a strain on the health system.
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