The growing number of overweight people is putting a strain on the health care system in an effort to deal the health-related issues. Some people think that the best way to deal with this problem is to introduce more physical education lessons in the education curriculum. To what extent you agree or disagree?

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obese people is putting

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pressure on

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hospitals in an effort to resolve the diseases

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it. Some citizens think that the optimal way to resolve

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hurdle is to incorporate more physical

education

classes in the

education

system.

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essay strongly agrees with

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statement because children spend a lot of

time

at

school

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it

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should

be use

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to

practice

physical activities at

early

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age and teenagers tend to obey more to their teachers

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parents

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at home.

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, teenagers spend

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amount of

time

at

school

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it is a great opportunity to

practice

every single day physical

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activities

activites

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activities

to help them to burn fat.

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, if

students

practice

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physical

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acitivities

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five times per

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hour during a

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week

,

this

could help them to start getting

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accustom

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to

practice

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sports

.

Also

, they might see physical

education

as part of the

school

curriculum and

this

help

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them to continue these

sport

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activities.

For instance

, in The United States, California, starting middle

school

, children

practice

physical

education

or P.E. every single day for an hour to help them feel healthier and reduce weight.

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has helped

students

to reduce the statistic of

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overweight

issue

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. Another reason why

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schools

should support children to reduce weight is that minors tend to obey more their teachers than their

parents

because at

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age some of them feel confused and frustrated.

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to

this

is that many

students

have

conflict

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with their

parents

and many of them avoid

to talk

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situation

do

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not help to find the right

time

to

practice

some

sports

.

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, many

parents

have two

full

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time

jobs

that

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by the

time

they get home, they just want to take a rest. As result, if

schools

support

students

to

practice

some type of activities at

school

, they will follow

teacher's

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command and these teens might continue in the future

practicing

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some type of

sports

. To illustrate

this

, in California, most

of

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the

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young adults suffer from

obese

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because twenty years ago,

schools

did not pay attention

of

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the importance of

doing

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physical activity, and

this

lead

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that many adults dislike

to play

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sports

.

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, hospitals are paying attention to

this

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facts and strongly believe that the best way to approach

this

issue is by implementing more physical

education

lessons at

school

. To conclude, in order to reduce the number of obese people,

schools

should include more physical

education

classes as part of their curriculum, and teach

students

the importance of

practicing

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some type of

sports

because they listen better to teachers than their

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parents

parets

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peers

.

This

will help to avoid putting a strain on the health system.