Schools are no longer necessary because children can get so much information available through the internet, and they can study just as well at home. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Some people think that
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becoming available everywhere, so children can get very much information through the Internet and don’t have to go to
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any longer. I partly agree with
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viewpoint.
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hand, schools have many benefits
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as you can ask your teachers about anything you don’t understand in an easy way.
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, you may meet face-to-face and talk with your friends directly.
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will help you more confident. Studying at
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have you concentrate on your lessons and understand them more easily.
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, during the Covid-19 crisis, I have to learn online. At that time, I couldn’t understand what the teacher says.
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a result, I got bad marks when I come back to learn at
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, I got good marks again.
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, studying at home through the Internet
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has its benefits.
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, you don’t have to travel far to attend your classes, just stay at home and turn on your cellphone or computer.
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, you can have flexible learning time. You can learn everywhere you want.
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conclusion, I think schools are still necessary and if you want to study well, you should combine
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at
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at home.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • social development
  • fostering communication
  • personalized guidance
  • immediate feedback
  • replicated
  • structured environments
  • discipline
  • time management skills
  • extracurricular activities
  • nurture talents
  • inculcate
  • sense of community
  • shared learning experiences
  • equal access
  • learning opportunities
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