“In modern world, it is no longer necessary to use animals for food or use animal products, for instance, clothing and medicines. To what extent do you agree or disagree?”

There is one kind of promotion that with the technology development, we should give up eating
animals
or using them for experiments.
Although
I do agree with the importance of animal protection, it is
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unnecessary
unnecesary
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unnecessary
to totally drop animal use for health purposes. It is crucial to protect animal diversity and animal living rights as possible.
As a result
, it is ideal to forbid slaughtering
animals
for commercial profit.
For instance
, wearing furs and feathers is a fashionable dressing style in some cold areas. It arouses many illegal
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issues and even causes some kind of
animals
to distinction because their feather values
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large amount of money.
Besides
that, there is a costume of eating those kinds of less common wild
animals
in some remote areas due to their different tastes from commonly reared
animals
. These kinds of greedy and selfish pursuits should be banned worldwide nowadays. From another aspect,
animals
could be helpful for human health and
medicine
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.
Firstly
, some kinds of animal products are not harmful
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animals
themselves,
such
as milk and
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variations of dairy, which can provide nutrients which are good for human beings.
Furthermore
, it is a traditional way to rear several species for their meat for
thousands
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years.
Thirdly
, using
animals
, like white rats or beagle dogs, for drug testing is an
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way to ensure the safety of new drugs. In conclusion, it is questionable to completely give up animal
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in our times.
However
, we should ban those actions against animal protection regulations and focus on how to treat edible
animals
properly.
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