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People have a better quality of life than in past centuries. DO YOU AGREE OR DISAGREE?

#people #quality #life #centuries
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Nowadays
people
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 are living
in
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the modern life which is much more convenient than in the past.While some
people
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 say that the past was better than now,
i
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 fully disagree with that opinion. Modern
people
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 are living better than
people
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 past because technology is improving to the positive side and transportation is too.Individuals are making video and voice calls to far
flungs
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flung
 from their
seat
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seats
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. It is very beneficial for
every one
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 who missed their friends and family.
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, an app called TELEGRAM, WHATSAPP and others
Othervise
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Otherwise
,plane ship and other means of transportation changed
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dramatically
dramaticly
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dramatically
.
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example
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 cars are reducing problems depending on time and comfort.
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, medicine is developing by helping
people
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 to find
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a cure
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cure
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cures
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 for their illnesses .Diseases
such
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 as GRIP and
new
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a new
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 one called COVID-19
has
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have
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 been prevented by new technologies
on
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in
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 medicine. In the
past
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people
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 were more friendly to each other
compare
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 to now.They helped each other to find
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a solution
the solution
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solution
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solutions
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 for their problems related to money and even social ones.But we
dont
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don't
thought
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 that they were
stage
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the stage
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 for
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this
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these
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technologies
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technology
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. In
conclusion
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 I
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believe
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belive
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believe
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 that modern technologies and era is better than life in the past.
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