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MORE PEOLPLE HAVE UNHEALTHY DIET AND DO NOT DO ENOUGH EXERCIESS WHAT ARE THE REASONS FOR THIS ? HOW CAN WE ENCOURAGE PEOPLE TO HAVE A HEALTHY LIFE STYLE

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It is true that in the past 3 decades, lifestyle has been changed completely for today's generation. Obesity is a debatable issue not only in one country but around the globe. I have discussed my viewpoints and justified the topic
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. Let's begin with,
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 who want to enjoy as much as they can and forget to take care of their
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, which is a huge loss of their life. An unhealthy
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 leads to obesity which caused some time damage to internal body issues. Especially, it comes to eating something
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 can't think about their pros and cons. Social gathering is the most common reason for
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 problem.
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, there are many occasions,
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 as marriage functions, birthday parties, housewarming parties and many more which serve an unhealthy
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. It is due to some cultures' beliefs that
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 don't want to change their traditions.
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, there is another important argument is that,
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 not aware of physical exercise and which causes obesity.
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, to reduce the calories your body needs some source of exercise which will help to burn the calories. Especially older
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 who are not aware of the source of the act,
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 they are suffering
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 a typical issue.
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, there are many ways to reduce eating
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 a kind of food and aware
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 to do some exercise. Now we are living in the 21st century which is full of modern technology
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 it is wrong to say that we don't have any source to do
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 an activity.
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, joining the Gym or Yoga class will definitely help to maintain your body fits. Government should start a campaign by advertising on television, publishing in the newspaper or by personal touch. Educated youngsters should guide the elder
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 about their
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 and provide them with logical information. To conclude, the world is facing
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 serious issue, which should not be neglected and world leaders should take responsibility for awareness programs. If it is not considered the world has to face huge problems in upcoming times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • unhealthy diet
  • exercises
  • nutritional value
  • processed foods
  • sedentary lifestyle
  • digital entertainment
  • public health campaigns
  • balanced diet
  • community-based initiatives
  • farmers' markets
  • wellness programs
  • government policies
  • subsidies
  • nutritional labeling
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