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What are the advantages and disadvantages of fast food and your opinion?

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There is no doubt that these days,
food
 has played a prominent role in human life for several centuries. The question is, Is fast
food
 going to lead to increased risk? in
this
 essay, I am going to discuss both views and draw my opinion in qouncloution. In
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 side ,freedom of choice is one of the key
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this
 claim Is that some people think fast
food
more
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teasty
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tasty
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food
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food
 restaurants . increasing
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increased
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consumption
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consumption
 of fast
food
 and obesity .in
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, fast
food
 is high
fat
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sugar
such
 as
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doughnuts
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pasta
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,fast
food
 is
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unhealthy
 and advertising it is irresponsible .
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because
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food
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stories
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 people need
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 and healthy
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 of eating . In
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conclusion
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, it is evident that Fast eating has its advantages and disadvantages .
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 of Health must ensure
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 are taken to prevent
this
 phenomenon from deteriorating future.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • convenience
  • lifestyles
  • long working hours
  • prepare meals
  • Regular consumption
  • health issues
  • obesity
  • heart disease
  • diabetes
  • high levels
  • sugars
  • fats
  • salts
  • economic factors
  • cheaper
  • healthier meal options
  • low-income families
  • students
  • cultural influence
  • global expansion
  • adapting menus
  • local tastes
  • integrating
  • environmental concerns
  • packaging waste
  • carbon footprints
  • meat production
  • traditional cuisine
  • decline
  • culinary heritage
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