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Some people believe that having a conversation on a mobile phone in a public or crowded place should be banned. Others feel that we should be able to talk wherever we like. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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In
this
 essay, I will consider different opinions regarding public phone usage. Some believe that mobile devices should only be used in private, while others think that there should be more freedom as to where they can use them.
This
 paper explores both opinions by discussing the advantages and disadvantages before reaching a conclusion.
To begin
 with, phones provide people with the opportunity to converse with one another at great distances.
This
 has led to a growing reliance on
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technology in order for people to speak with loved ones.
For example
, it is not uncommon for a person to receive a call during a train commute.
However
,
this
 could disrupt other customers in the same carriage, causing grief and discomfort. There are,
furthermore
, instances where communications take place in museums or art galleries, which could likely disrupt one's experience.
Nevertheless
, many argue that talking in crowded spaces should be allowed and there are times
where
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 it is an absolute necessity.
For instance
, a parent may receive an emergency call from their child's school, informing them of an accident. Some professionals,
such
 as doctors or police officers,
also
 need to be available in the event their services are required. In fact, a recent study, conducted by the University of London, found that ninety-five
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 of teenagers are in favour of using telephones in public for myriad reasons.
Thus
, while it is context specific, it seems the general consensus is that there should be free reign when it comes to conversing in public;
this
,
in particular
, applies to professions that require they are accessible,
such
 as nurses and carers.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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