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It is better for students to work before their university study? To what extent do you agree or disagree.

#students #work #university #study
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Some people think it is a good idea for scholars to get some practical experience at
work
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 before they proceed to higher education. In my opinion, I agree with
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 because the
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 gotten from these jobs can be transferred to other areas and it
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 gives them
work
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experiences
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 with, working before going to
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university
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 helps
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the student
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student
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students
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 learn some practical
skills
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. These
skills
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 as teamwork, decision-making and critical thinking can be transferred to other areas of their lives when they get into the
university
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.
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,
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 will help them in their academics and in their relationship with their course mates which will make their
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 life seamless.
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, most of the computing
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 I knew as an undergraduate
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skills
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 I learnt while working prior to entering the
university
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. Another factor to consider is that
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work
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 exposure before the
university
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 gives applicants
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experiences
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experience
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, most employers require that fresh graduates have a
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 history,
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 always
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 impossible for someone just leaving the
university
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. These
work
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experiences
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 before
university
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 fill
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 vacuum thereby making them suitable and preferred candidates.
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, research has found
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that people with
work
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experiences
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experience
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 are never out of
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a job
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job
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jobs
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 as they get jobs easily. Giving applicants an edge
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 others is one reason why
work
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 experience prior to going to the
university
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 is good. In conclusion, I believe students should get practical
skills
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on
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 jobs prior to going to
the
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apply
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university
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 because it helps them get more
skills
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 and gives them
work
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 experience.
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