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A magazine wants to include contributions from its readers for an article called the book that influenced me most. Write a letter to the editor of the magazine about the book that influenced you most. In your letter •Describe what this book was about •Explain how this book influenced you •Say whether this book would be likely to influence other people Write at least 150 words. You do not need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Sir or Madam,

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Dear Sir or Madam, My name is Keyhan and I am writing to respond to the article with the title of "The book that influenced me most". As I am not the one who spends a great amount of time on novels and I come
along with
 some of them incidentally, I must confess that when I first read the novel with the name of " Kafka on the Shore" two years ago I became interested at first and time passing I figured out that it absorbed me in a way that I could not notice around.
However
, the subject and the plot were not my favourites at first but I became gradually interested. The subject was about an interaction and relation between an animal and a human being which puts you in a doubtful situation and makes you bewildered. I suppose
this
 book can impact the majority of the readers to make them more motivated to read the other books written by
this
 author in the future. Thank you for considering my letter and I look forward to hearing from you soon. yours sincerely, Ebrahimi Keyhan
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Task Achievement
Introduce your main ideas more clearly in each paragraph to improve clarity and impact.
Coherence & Cohesion
Use a range of cohesive devices to better link your ideas and paragraphs.
Task Achievement
Consider elaborating further on how the book influenced you personally for a stronger response.
Task Achievement
You followed the provided task instructions well, discussing the chosen book and its influence.
Coherence & Cohesion
The closing and greeting were appropriately formal and well done.
Coherence & Cohesion
Your paragraphing indicates a good attempt at organizing your letter around different ideas.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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