Some people think it is better to have many short holidays during the year. Others believe it would be beneficial to have fewer, longer vacations. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Several people do believe that shorter vacations are better,

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there are some humans that disagree with that and think that fewer

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would lead to higher productivity and improved grades. There are many reasons why a longer vacation could be more beneficial for the younger generation,

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as ; increased output , more interest and dedication,

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on the matter would be that

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reduce stress and anxiety for the kids and make it easier to focus and work harder in class. There can be some disadvantages of prolonged holidays in the future since in the long run they could become

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lazy and forget about the classes they have learned more easily to ensure that

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a travesty (horrid act) does not take place we could

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focus on having not as many

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we would be forced to reduce the free time of these kids which does indeed bear some disadvantages but the positives may outweigh the cost. To follow up on

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believe that shorter

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of leave could result in improved results and discipline overall in these young people's lives,

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do think that

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could prove to be better than too long

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less free time and a decrease in their social presence which could prove to be an issue in the future while social skills are

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required for success and important for their general health,

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came to the conclusion that having balanced

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are the best thing we could do not too many or too little. Overall , as

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said before the best thing would be to find some kind of equilibrium, which would enable us to make sure that these children are normal and educated at the end of their school career

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would be forced to choose between the two

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would personally say that it's better to have

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than too many , simply because it would prove to be more effective in their lives rather than making them indolent.