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Without capital punishment (the death penalty) our lives are less secure and crimes of violence increase. Capital punishment is essential to control violence in society. To what extent do you agree or disagree to this opinion?

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Violence
crimes
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 are rapidly increasing in many developed countries due to poor
law
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enforcement
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 and misusage of human rights. The security of our lives is the most important factor in a society where capital
punishment
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 is necessary to reduce crime rates. Does every criminal deserve capital
punishment
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? In
this
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 essay, I will examine the facts from both points of view and
then
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 explain why I believe capital
punishment
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 is necessary. There are many repeat
criminals
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 in many societies because the
punishment
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 is not that serious for the
crimes
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 they committed. In
such
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 cases,
law
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enforcement
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 does not apply capital
punishment
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 strongly, whereas, maintaining decent human rights,
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 as considerations of the criminal's age, their family matters and their living conditions. Many people believe that all humans equally deserved a
second
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 chance which gives less security in return. Without capital
punishment
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, the crime rates did not decrease at all
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 more
crimes
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 occurred since some
criminals
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 knew how to abuse the system for their own benefit.
On the other hand
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, capital
punishment
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 is too strong that young
criminals
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 didn't get the chance to correct themselves, not even once. Since there are little few known differences between repeat
criminals
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 and
first
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-timers for
law
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enforcement
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, they usually judge both of them equally.
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, many people learned the lessons from the other punishments and not dared to commit them again for any reason,
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, the distribution of drugs is capital
punishment
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 by
law
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 no matter how young the criminal is or how small the amount of drugs is. With capital
punishment
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, the community become more secure as well as more peaceful, which assures quality lives for many people. Of cause the stronger the
law
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 is enforced, the few
crimes
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 happened in society. In conclusion, I believe that the safety of our lives is a top priority, so capital
punishment
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 is essential to reduce crime rates, especially in serious cases.
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,
law
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enforcement
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 should consider giving the chances for
first
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-timers whether they deserve the chance for correction or not.
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