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The number of people working online from home has grown in some countries. What are the advantages and disadvantages?

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The
internet
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 has made
work
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 easy for a lot of companies ,especially during the period of
covid-19
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.
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, the world is
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 becoming a global village and
this
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 has led most individuals to prefer working online because of the benefits . The essay below will discuss the pros and cons of doing business on the
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internet
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 in depth.
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 with, working online has a lot of advantages.
Firstly
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, the
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internet
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 has no time limit, which means employees can
work
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 anytime without any limitations even at night.
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, there are no space or distance problems when doing business on air. People can
work
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 in Britain
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 they are in Africa.
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, nowadays most teachers and other professionals do their jobs online since we are in the period of
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 where social distancing is a better option. A study by Mark Lin in 2020 found that about five per cent of online teachers in China came from Africa.
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, online jobs have limitations.
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such
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 jobs are not all-inclusive, they are in favour of the haves. People living in remote areas without electricity and
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 are excluded.
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there are many fake employers on the
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 and most individuals have lost money through scammers.
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, my cousin got an online teaching job
last
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 year in April, when she was about
to begin
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 the job they asked for three thousand United States dollars to secure her job. After being asked for money, she knew it was a scam and she immediately reported and blocked the site. In conclusion, the essay above discussed the benefits and limitations of doing
work
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 online. Some of the advantages are that
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space and time are compressed, which means people can
work
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 from anywhere and anytime. The pros are that
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 those without network and electricity are excluded from
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 opportunities and there are too many scammers these days.

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task response
Your essay contains a clear introduction and conclusion that address the prompt, reflecting an understanding of the task requirements, which is positive. However, the introduction could better paraphrase the prompt and set up your discussion.
coherence and cohesion
You have presented ideas that relate to the topic, but the arguments need to be developed further and connected more clearly for a coherent flow. Use a wider range of cohesive devices to better structure your paragraphs and link them.
task response
Ensure that you provide stronger support for your ideas through more specific examples and detailed explanations, which will help to fully address the task prompt.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • remote work
  • telecommuting
  • flexibility
  • commuting
  • work-life balance
  • autonomy
  • productivity
  • focus
  • job opportunities
  • social interaction
  • isolation
  • boundaries
  • motivation
  • discipline
  • resources
  • support
  • sedentary
  • physically active
  • responsibilities
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