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Write about the following topic. The most important function of music is that it helps people reduce stress. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

#topic #function #music #people #stress
People
 believed
music
 is a fundamental factor in their lives
,
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 because the most prominent factor that helps humans is to reduce
stress
 through listening to songs or instrumental
music
, but some opponents claim that
this
 is distracting and disturbing. ,
However
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 I agree that
music
 reduces our
stress
 and my point of view about
this
 statement will be adequately discussed in the subsequent paragraphs. To commence with, from the ancient era
people
 held different views about listening to songs. Humans used harmonious sounds to relax their hormones,
evidently
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this
 type of hormone is called endorphins which are stored in moods of singing and happiness
of
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people
,
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eventually
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this
 will reduce
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stress
 of
people
. As an example, one of my friends always listens to
music
, which she tells us that it helps her to fight
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the
stress
 she is going through, especially while she is at work she used to listen to songs over and over again to keep her warm up throughout the day.
Therefore
music
 is one of the best ways to relieve your
stress
.
On the other hand
, listening to
music
 is one of therapy for
people
, specifically for
people
 who are working in a stressful environment
such
 as doctors and teachers. As an example, doctors play
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 enormous role, during an operation inside the theatre some doctors ask to play
music
 to deprive themselves of the stressful situation they are going through.
In other words
, to conclude I strongly agree that
music
 is the most common way to combat
stress
 because it releases a certain kind of hormone to relax
people
 and is used as a therapy.
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