Some people believe that car-free days are affective ways to reduce air population. However, others ways that are more effective. Discuss both of these views and give your own opinion.

Today more and more feel that designed car-free
days
are successful ways to bring
air
population
.
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advocates of
this
view argue that
cars
should be few to reduce
air
population
. Others,
however
, disagree and
believes
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that there are alternative ways that are more and more effective. On the one hand those in favour of keeping
clearness
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air
population
, because most people feel better in
fresh
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air
.
This
have
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valid reasons to be concerned about
air
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the air
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population
.
For instance
, because many countries have tremendous factories and different automobiles, the
air
population
is not always good. But many countrysides
than
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have
cleaner
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a cleaner
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air
population
than cities. The reason for
this
there
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aren't many factories and
cars
. That's why the
air
here is clean.
Furthermore
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there don't industry extra gases and hazardous
substance
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substances
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and everything is natural. In my view
also
counties decrease
pollutant
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pollutants
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and the laws existing
in
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country
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the country
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need to be aimed at car-free
days
and improving
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the
air
population
.
On the other hand
, there are many people who would argue that the car-free
days
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damage not only
air
-
pupulation
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population
,
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but relieve our lives.
Therefore
, others disagree and believe that don't need to
car free
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days
. Indeed we need to somewhere urgent situation to
cars
.
For example
, when people want to go
to
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abroad or hospital long distances they need
to
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cars
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. But now different types need to
cars
are producing
and
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more gas which is harmful to health and
air
. In
conclude
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,
although
the hazardous for
air
population
besides
our health. There is
need
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for the
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car-free
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car free
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car-free
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days
to be regulated by introducing strict politics. In my
opinion
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both sides are correct.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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