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Some people believe tertiary education should be free, but others say universities should charge students. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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It is said that
although
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 a group of individuals present the view that it is necessary for
universities
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 to charge
students
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, others are of the opinion that tertiary education should be free. I strongly agree with the former opinion. On the one hand, some
people
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 justifiably argue that charging
students
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 for
universities
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 leads to more studying with better quality, so they can pass their courses in a timely manner.
Otherwise
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, they should pay
tuition
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 for each extra educational course which did not pass on time.
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,
as a result
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 of not being free
tuition
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 for
universities
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, the government can invest in the other part of development.
Due to
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 the fact that university expenditures are money consuming
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 as laboratory instruments, libraries, and different facilities. They impose hefty expenses on the government
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 emitting them provides better opportunities for construction infrastructures and healthcare programs.
On the other hand
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, another group of
people
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 claim that
as a result
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 of free tertiary education, each person can
benefit
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 from
this
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 option. They insist that if it is not necessary to think about university
tuition
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, the difference between rural and urban
students
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 is more likely would be emitted. So that it leads to equality in educational access. Another perceived
benefit
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 of not charging
universities
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 is that it gives rise to an increasing willingness among
people
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 to
benefit
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 from tertiary education.
As a result
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 of obtaining higher qualifications, better job opportunities would be proposed.
For instance
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, they can get a promotion from general staff to manager.
However
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, in my view,
this
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 argument is not valid since most
people
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 can get a loan or use other facilities,
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, to applying for part-time jobs to pay
tuition
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 fees.
Furthermore
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, they can
benefit
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 from other short-term placements in order to learn a job or get a promotion.
To conclude
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, in my view, I completely believe
universities
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 should charge
students
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. Because it helps the quality of the university grow a step ahead and controls money consumption for the government.

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Task Achievement
Make sure to provide even more varied and detailed examples to support your arguments, enriching your essay further.
Task Achievement
Pay attention to developing a balanced discussion of both views before stating your own opinion. This ensures a comprehensive coverage of the essay topic.
Coherence and Cohesion
Consider using a wider range of linking words and phrases to enhance the flow of your essay, making it even more cohesive.
Task Achievement
Strive to maintain balance in the development of both sides of the argument for an unbiased exploration, even if you have a strong opinion towards one.
Coherence and Cohesion
You've effectively introduced and concluded your essay, laying a good foundation for your argument.
Coherence and Cohesion
Well-structured paragraphs aid in the logical flow of the essay, making your arguments easy to follow.
Task Achievement
You have provided relevant examples to back up your points, enhancing the credibility of your arguments.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • tertiary education
  • fundamental right
  • socio-economic background
  • equality
  • innovation
  • student debt burden
  • financial strain
  • tuition fees
  • facilities
  • research opportunities
  • motivated
  • engaged
  • taxes
  • subsidized
  • specialized fields
  • exclusive expertise
  • economy
  • productivity
  • workforce
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