Many parents these days work in other countries talking their families with them. Do you think the advantages it's disadvantages?

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and
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usually
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work in foreign
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take
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their family with them. In my opinion. The benefits of
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trend. Admittedly, many breadwinners take their families
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countries
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for earning money. One of the drawbacks,
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that
children
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find themselves in culturally and socially different
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, which can
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to high levels of stress and disappointment. Another
disadvantages
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is that
other
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can strengthen
financial
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burden on
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breadwinner
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.
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, mother and father spend their money
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teach
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their
children
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.
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,
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for their food and lodging.
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, if the
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doesn't take his family abroad with him.
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many parents leave their homeland, their
children
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fell
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homesick. And in
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children
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the
felling
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feeling
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of affection gradually disappears.
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a result they become
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bullies
.
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, they drift apart
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family member,
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person and prefer friends. Another reason,
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the
breadwinner
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takes his family
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a
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foreign
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countries
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country
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or not they spend money for their family.
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, parents tend to
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childminding
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their
children
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when
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abroad and it's expensive. In conclusion, the way I see it there are discussed
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two reasons
of
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argument for
to
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nowadays, many
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breadwinner
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breadwinners
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works in other foreign
countries
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take
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and take
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their family member with them.
Altought
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Although
, that both sides,
also
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are important for every
families
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family
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.
This
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is provide
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that they are
in
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safe. If every family has
a parents
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parents
a parent
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, it will well-brought-uo
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children
childrens
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children

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