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Technolgy today such as mobile phones are destroying social interactions. Do you agree or disagree?

#technolgy #phones #interactions
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With the improvement of technology
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 as mobile phones, the internet, and applications, The world is becoming increasingly digital.
People
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 say it has a destructive impact on social
interaction
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 and decreases social
interaction
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. I disagree with
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 statement as I believe it just transforms it and has a positive effect on human communications. New technologies have broken down the communication barrier that distance once presented. You can contact anyone around the world immediately. With video calling apps like Skype and Zoom,
people
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 can experience emotional connections without having to be in the same room.
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, during Corona Virus pandemic, which forces families to separate apart, it helps them to stay in touch.
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, other features,
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 as sending messages allow
people
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 the time to process information and send a proper response and avoid so much trouble. Technologies help
people
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 with physical or mental issues to step out of their comfort zone.
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, it helps
people
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 with social anxiety gain confidence by
practicing
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interaction
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 over the internet
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 of face-to-face. Or online dating apps make it easier to find love for introverted
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. And
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, disabled
people
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 can forget physical boundaries inside a video game universe.
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, it helps so many
people
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 who don't have typical characteristics in society means find similar ones faster and make their own communities. In conclusion, new technologies
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 as mobile phones and digital applications have not lessened social interactions. They have positively changed the way of
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 and increased the good relationship among different individuals.
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