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Many people argue that eating junk food has led to an unhealthy lifestyle. This problem has become more common among young people these days. Do you agree or disagree that junk food is the cause of the issue?

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In Today's contemporary, all hamburgers, sodas or french fries are totally in groups of junk food. The majority of people especially the youthful population are used to
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 these kinds of unwholesome
foods
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 these meals have many divergent cons and may have led to
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 many issues for consumers. Some of the consequences will be elaborated in on my essay. On the one hand, one of the leading factors that
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 eating fast food is not beneficial, has to do with suffering from obesity. Annually many folks
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several countries die due to
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. Consuming a great amount of trash
food stuff
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 in order to receive barely calories as you need during
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can make different diseases like blood pressure or heart attack.
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, these effects of the rubbish dish may not be compensated.
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, coca-cola is harmful
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producers have been using a lot of
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sugar
 in order production of it.
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, drinking one coca means that you eat 10
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sugar
 spoons. On the
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, in the growing community, people get involved sedentary lifestyle and do have not much time to allocate to do their home stuff like cooking or cleaning compared to the previous generations,
then
, they make an effort to find better alternatives to address these difficulties. Folks in past used to spend many time and energy
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home-made
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homemade
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foods
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 nowadays
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developing
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technology
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, not only would
youngesters
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youngsters
 like to choose burgers but they would like to
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 their friends,
also
.
Furthermore
, people prefer to purchase fast
foods
 to eat rapidly as well, afterwards, they might ignore the modified materials or hygiene which use inside the snacks or drinks. To recapitulate what I mentioned above, in my mind overeating in these types of category
foods
 will be a problematic topic for humans if he is not aware of the detrimental and the benefits, whereas, it has profit as much as adverse.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • dietary habits
  • self-control
  • advertising
  • appealing
  • convenience culture
  • fast food
  • obesity rates
  • nutritional education
  • affordability
  • psychological effects
  • well-being
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