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People today shop, work and communicate with others via the Internet instead of face-to-face communication. Is it a positive or negative development?

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The
Internet
 has become more and more popular all over the world for a long
time
. There are both pros and cons for the public to communicate with each other online. My view is that using the
internet
 to communicate with other
people
 has more benefits overall.
Firstly
, it is obvious that the public is getting closer to each other than before after using the
internet
.
This
 is because
people
 used to communicate with their friends who were living oversea by written letters and sometimes it took over 2 months to deliver them. After using the
internet
,
people
 can talk with their friends at any
time
 and in any place all over the world.
Moreover
,
people
 can save lots of
time
 by using the
internet
.
For example
, some university students may spend 1 hour going to school every day, now they can take classes online and save them 1 hour on the way to school. So that they have extra 1 hour every day to do what they are interested in.
That is
 not to say that using the
internet
 to communicate with
people
 has no disadvantages. There is a sign that more and more adults are relying on the
internet
 for their daily life
such
 as online shopping, playing games, watching movies and so on
instead
 of going out for social. But it is still a small number of
people
. In summary, it is a great thing for
people
 to shop, work and communicate online because the
internet
 can help
people
 to communicate with each other easier and save everyone’s
time
. Meanwhile, the public may reduce their social behaviour face-to-face due to the
internet
.
Therefore
,
people
 should try to adjust how much
time
 they gonna spend online every day.
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