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In your view, what is the most important thing for governments to spend money on: education, health, transportation, or something else? Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own experience or knowledge.

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Nowadays, society continues to develop, people's living standards are steadily improving, and society is entering a slow
development
 stage. The
government
 has
also
 included how to use and better allocate
government
 resources
into
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in
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 the discussion. How to better allocate and use
government
 resources has become a hot topic of national discussion from the perspective of economy,
education
 and sustainable
development
, I think the
government
 should invest more time and money in
education
.
First
 of all, the
development
 of
education
 can improve the comprehensive
education
level
 of the nationals, which can improve the income
level
 of the nationals, and
furthermore
, the
education
level
 of the citizens will be improved, and
accordingly
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 their cultural quality will be improved, and their ability to solve problems and analyze things will be improved
accordingly
, which will improve the competitiveness of individuals, both domestically and internationally.
Finally
, only if the income
level
 of a country's citizens increases, they can pay more taxes to feed the
development
 of the national economy. According to China's seventh census bulletin, the population with
university
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education
 is about 200 million; the population with high school (including secondary school)
education
 is about 200 million, the two
item
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items
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 together only account for about one-fourth of the total population, 600 million people in China have a monthly income of less than 1,000 RMB, a large number of poor people still objectively exist,
besides
education
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,education
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 there are other ways to change their fate? Obviously,
education
 is the best solution to poverty at present. Some c citizens have said that it is difficult to achieve universal access to
education
, but there is no more equitable opportunity to help those in poverty than
education
. Overall, I think investing in
education
 is the most important thing for a country.
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  • allocation of resources
  • socioeconomic development
  • innovation
  • public health
  • infrastructure
  • sustainable practices
  • conservation
  • equality
  • trade
  • emergency preparedness
  • safety nets
  • mitigating
  • critical thinking
  • outbreaks
  • workforce
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