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Some schools require their students to wear uniforms because they believe it helps the students focus on their schoolwork rather than on their clothes. Discuss this view and give your own opinion.

#schools #students #uniforms #focus #schoolwork #clothes
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believe
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helping
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. My opinion is that
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uniform
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students
,
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helped
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assistants
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indication
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students
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colors
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 of some
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,
forthermore
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furthermore
, girls can
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clothes
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 of some boys.
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, some
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adolecents
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adolescents
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exhibition
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exhibition
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intention
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intention
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make
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others
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students
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 psychological and in some cases taking
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bullying
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because
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 their vestments.
Thirdly
, the
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uniforms
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 a sense of equality and assistants in the safety,
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, is util in the
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students
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then
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, avoid different people enter at the school. In conclusion, I believe that
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 schools force wear
uniforms
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learned
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 of the
students
,
nonetheless
,
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 is very important for
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indication
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 of the
students
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also
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