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Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondarySome school. What extent do you agree or disagree

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According to a few specialists, it adds an advantage for kids if they begin learning a foreign
language
 in the initial stage of their schooling rather than later and I completely agree with
this
 statement as it is believed that children retain the knowledge which is taught at a younger age as compared to their later years.
Also
, international
language
 helps in shaping a pupil's perspective about other cultures, habits and way of speaking which assist their interaction skills right from the beginning. According to recent studies, it has been observed that students understand and retain topics which are taught in their primary schooling for much longer than things which are taught in secondary school.
Therefore
, if children start learning any foreign
language
 at the start of their education
then
 they have better command over it and as they grow in their career they will keep on getting better with grammar, vocabulary and sentence formation.
Also
, students have comparatively less burden in smaller classes so they will have more time to practice the
language
 and
as a
result
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 have a better grip whereas in secondary school they already have a vast syllabus to cover which gives them less time to learn something new. There are several benefits of learning
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 overseas
language
. It gives you an idea about other people's cultures, habits and the way they speak. If kids are introduced to these new languages at the primary stage they will develop better interaction skills right from the start which help them to be better communicators in future.
Also
, they can think of many other career options right from the start
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activists
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. To conclude my thoughts, I support
this
 belief from experts that
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 advantageous for students to acquire
this
 skill
initially
 rather than in secondary school for better command over the
language
 and to have a better understanding of it.
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