Many believe that religion is not a good thing, others say it is. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Religion

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significant for many cultures.There are plenty of religions,

people

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and people

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believe in different gods but there is one mutual part of every

religion

. It plays a huge role in

people

's lives. Is it a good impact or not? I would like to present my point of view.

Firstly

, I believe that

religion

can definitely

impacts

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people

's lives in a positive way. Humans believe in god, who in most cases is a good character, who tells you how to be a good person and that it is significant to help others and live in peace.

For instance

people

strongly connected to church

are often volunteers

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in some social institutions, which help ill or poor

people

. They

also

donate money

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people

in need.

Moreover

religion

can be helpful in grief.

People

seek answers and it can be comforting,

belief

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, that there is a life

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after

afer

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after

death and it is just

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matter of time

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when

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they will meet their

love

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ones.

On the other hand

religion

can

also

cause harm and death.

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, terrorist attacks were caused by

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belief in god. Those

people

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claimed, they were killing others and themselves as well, in order to please their god and go to heaven afterwards. A good illustration of that

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can be the

catolic

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catholic

church, which is homophobic. It should not matter,

who

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the person loves. It is a private sphere and there is nothing wrong with it. As far as I can tell,

religion

can be good or bad but it depends on how a specific person

interpret

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it. Personally, I believe, that it can be dangerous to devote yourself

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belief completely.

People

need to find a balance between, what is in the Bible or any other holy book and their personal beliefs

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because following blindly every single rule written by

church

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can cause trouble.

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