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Many criminals re-offend after they have been punished. Why do some people continue to commit crimes after they have been punished, and what measures can be taken to tackle this problem?

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One of the most significant headaches that countries are facing is the
population
 problem. The
population
 issue considerably influences each country's economy, including the environment. Rapid
population
 growth has made a massive impact on the world, particularly the economy. One of these issues is unemployment, which decreases the gross domestic product per capita.
This
 particularly impacts underdeveloped countries as the government will have to spend Which will possibly affect access to basic necessities for
people
 with low income. These basic necessities include access to accommodation and food, and could in turn have significant consequences on the health of
people
. Decreased food could translate to malnutrition, and increased problems
such
 as anorexia.
This
 leads to the depletion of natural resources,
such
 as environmental degradation and air and water pollution.
Also
, young
people
 in underdeveloped countries often do not have access to family planning.
education
, and contraception. The crucial reason is that the birth rate has increased more significantly compared to the death rate. Governments in overpopulated nations have a variety of effective solutions at their disposal.
For example
, Vietnam has family planning laws that limit the number of children per family to two.
In addition
, the
education
 of young children combined with propaganda to change
people
's perception of the current
population
 growth problem helps
people
 have more information and knowledge about the application of
population
 policies and family planning.
Population
education
 must be widely implemented, targeting many audiences, especially children's
education
. In conclusion, by reducing the
population
 so that the country is more and more developed and reducing the rate of social evils, for the Vietnamese
people
in particular
 and the world in general,
people
's lives are better.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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