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Many criminals re-offend after they have been punished. Why do some people continue to commit crimes after they have been punished, and what measures can be taken to tackle this problem?

#criminals #re-offend #people #crimes #measures
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One of the most significant headaches that countries are facing is the
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 problem. The
population
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 issue considerably influences each country's economy, including the environment. Rapid
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 growth has made a massive impact on the world, particularly the economy. One of these issues is unemployment, which decreases the gross domestic product per capita.
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 particularly impacts underdeveloped countries as the government will have to spend Which will possibly affect access to basic necessities for
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 with low income. These basic necessities include access to accommodation and food, and could in turn have significant consequences on the health of
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. Decreased food could translate to malnutrition, and increased problems
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 as anorexia.
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 leads to the depletion of natural resources,
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 as environmental degradation and air and water pollution.
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, young
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 in underdeveloped countries often do not have access to family planning.
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, and contraception. The crucial reason is that the birth rate has increased more significantly compared to the death rate. Governments in overpopulated nations have a variety of effective solutions at their disposal.
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, Vietnam has family planning laws that limit the number of children per family to two.
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, the
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 of young children combined with propaganda to change
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's perception of the current
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 growth problem helps
people
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 have more information and knowledge about the application of
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 policies and family planning.
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education
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 must be widely implemented, targeting many audiences, especially children's
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. In conclusion, by reducing the
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 so that the country is more and more developed and reducing the rate of social evils, for the Vietnamese
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 and the world in general,
people
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's lives are better.
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I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • recidivism
  • rehabilitation
  • reintegration
  • social stigma
  • vocational training
  • economic desperation
  • mental health support
  • institutionalization
  • peer influence
  • mentorship programs
  • crime cycle
  • societal inclusion
  • job readiness programs
  • re-offending
  • ex-offenders
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