The first car appeared on British roads in 1888. By the year 2000 there may be as many as 29 million vehicles on British roads. Alternative forms of transport should be encouraged and international laws introduced to control car ownership and use. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The
first
vehicle appeared on British roads in 1888 12 years later everybody has their own
car
. The crowd should
use
alternative transport
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views and give a conclusion. I agree with
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idea because it leads
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pollution and many diseases.
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individual
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must reduce
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car
ownership. Using a
car
will increase diseases and air pollution. Research conducted by CNN revealed that Cars and other personal vehicles
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not
environmentally-friendly
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therefore
the crowd should abandon
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them. They should find alternative vehicles
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bicycles and public
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.
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reason is it leads to traffic. Traffic is the biggest problem in
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century. It steals
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time and if individuals untangle that solution they should not
use
car
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the car
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. If everybody uses cars traffic will increase and the community stuck on the road. The solution is
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arrange
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ownership laws and increase
of
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the
car
price. if people can not buy a
car
they have to
use
transport. It will solve the solution. It will avoid energy consumption.
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, I think people should go
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foot but almost 29 million of person
uses
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a
car
. It leads to overspending because people can do better things with that money.
For
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making an investment
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in crypto
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crypto currency
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cryptocurrency
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or other currencies. Research conducted by CNBC revealed that Governments should encourage
people`s
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for using alternative ways
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example, individuals can go to the hospital or workplace without using any vehicle. They should not
use
any vehicle for their health and lifestyle. In conclusion, using
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busses
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buses
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or
bicycle
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bicycles
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always
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better
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way than using a
car
. Because it is less harmful to
environment
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the environment
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • reliance on
  • regulate
  • traffic congestion
  • pollution
  • public health
  • sustainable development
  • alternative forms of transport
  • car ownership
  • balancing benefits and drawbacks
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