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Some people think that technology makes life complex, so we should make our life simpler without using technology. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is apparent that
technology
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 makes things that
people
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 do on a daily basis become more complicated;
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, some
people
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 believe that we should get rid of
technology
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 in order to simplify our
life
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. Personally, I strongly disapprove of the given statement. In
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 essay, I am going to cite some of the
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 behind my disagreement. On the one hand, it is imprudent to discount the latent drawbacks brought by the advancement of
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.
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, the elderly would find it difficult to figure out how the system of
technology
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 works as it is quite unusual for them to work with.
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, old
people
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 are used to reading news printed on paper due to its easy approach.
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, reading news online seems to be too complicated for them.
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, the
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 of technological devices is
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 involved in why
people
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 reject using
technology
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. Despite the adverse effects mentioned, the superior advantage
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technology
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 provides us is undeniable. Mobile phones, to be specific, make
life
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 easier not only to communicate but
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 to store data.
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, it is effortless for users to find information with only a phone or computer. In terms of convenience,
technology
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 provides us with automation which serves our daily
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such
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 as automatic AC
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 its temperature. With that, it actually makes
life
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 more simple. To conclude, I would contend that the benefit of applying
technology
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 to daily
life
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 clearly outweighs its drawback.
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older
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 generation
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contrast
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view
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 regarding
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, it is safe to say that the world is developing thanks to
technology
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