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Many people today find they have insufficient time to spend with their families, because of pressures of work. What problems does this create for individuals and their families? What solutions can you propose? Which would be the most effective solution, in your view?

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Increasingly, professionals around the world haven't enough
time
 to spend with their families, and it happens because of the pressures of
work
. Indeed, workloads can cause bad situations
such
 as developing health issues
,
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 and until, matrimonial troubles in families.
Thus
, I'm going to put my opinion in
this
 essay to discuss both sides. The
first
 side is about those who consider themself a workaholic and in these cases, the problem is with each person. I mean, they spend a lot of
time
 working without enjoying their families only because they are vitiated to
work
 overtime. An article written by a specialist in business
companies
 brings up some data which prove that around 60% of businessmen already had a divorce or living in
a
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 accid relationship with their partners. In fact, balancing personal or professional life is not easy,
however
 in
this
 case the problem should be solved for those who suffer from these disturbances.
Secondly
, there are some situations caused by
companies
 that force their employees to
work
 overtime every day, and either weekend.
For instance
, research from the New York
Time
 journal brought up vital information about
companies
 that
work
 in pharmaceuticals industries, banks and the stock market field, and
in addition
, about 70% of employees from these markets are suffering our suffered from anxiety, depression or other mental disturbances. I'm not an expert on
this
 topic, but in my mind,
companies
 must invest more attention and money to fix the style of
work
 and support their employees with a healthy environment. To conclude, humanity is getting worse for many reasons and
such
 problems as a mental
disorder
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,
as a result
 of, a lack of
time
 management and priorities
such
 as spending
time
 with family. Don't miss out on the opportunity to have free
time
 for your family.
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  • 1. **Flexible working hours**: Work schedules that allow employees to vary their arrival and departure times.
  • 2. **Remote working**: Working from a location other than the traditional office, usually from home.
  • 3. **Work-life balance**: The equilibrium between personal life and career work.
  • 4. **Mental health**: A person’s condition with regard to their psychological and emotional well-being.
  • 5. **Paid family leave**: Time off work with pay granted to employees to take care of family members.
  • 6. **Time management**: The process of planning and exercising conscious control of time spent on specific activities.
  • 7. **Prioritize**: To arrange or deal with in order of importance.
  • 8. **Guilt**: A feeling of having done wrong or failed in an obligation.
  • 9. **Neglected**: Suffering a lack of proper care.
  • 10. **Behavioral issues**: Actions and mannerisms exhibited by individuals, often resulting from stress or emotional instability.
  • 11. **Support systems**: Networks of people who provide an individual with practical or emotional support.
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