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International sporting events like the Olympics and football World Cup place huge financial burdens on host national that cannot be justified. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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The organisation
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 of great tournaments
such
 as
football
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the football
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 World Cup and Olympics is believed to be a big money pit for
it's
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its
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 host.
Although
this
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these
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 events cost a lot,
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the
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development of tourism,
economy
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the economy
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 and
increasing
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increase
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 in
happiness
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the happiness
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 of residents make them a good investment.
Firstly
such
 a big event happening in the
country
 leads to
development
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the development
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 of
touristic
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tourist
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 infrastructure. While people visit the
country
, competition between hotels, restaurants cafes and other facilities increases. International standards are being integrated.
Consequently
,
country
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the country
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 becomes more convenient for tourists after the tournament as well, meanwhile if the competition didn't happen the
country
 would be less preferable for tourists in future.
Second
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The second
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 reason is psychological. Events taking place every day, people
who
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whom
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 you've never seen before. All
this
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these
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 activities create a unique atmosphere of something special,
consequently
, people are filled
by
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with
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 emotions they have never had and situations they would never face.
In other
words
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 while
all
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apply
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the world is following the news from that event, residents of that
country
 are
in
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at
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 the
epicenter
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epicentre
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 of these activities and the happiness it brings
worth
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is worth
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 the money spent on it. In
conclusion
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,conclusion
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 emotional
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fulfilment
fulfillness
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fulfilment
 of residents and
further
 economical development bring a lot of benefits to the host
country
.
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