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Friends have more impact on the academic performance of students than their teachers do. Do you agree or disagree? Use details and examples to support your opinion.

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Education is a crucial part of a
child
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's life and not only parents and
teachers
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 have an influence on the
studies
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, but
also
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friends
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 play
major
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a major
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 part in
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child's
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a child's
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 education.
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Academic
 performance is considered to be the key to success and parents always want their children to perform the best in their
studies
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. In my opinion,
friends
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 have more influence on the academics of
students
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 than
teachers
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. I feel
this
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 way because of certain reasons which will be described in the following essay.
Firstly
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,
students
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 spend more
time
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 with their
friends
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 than with their
teachers
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.
That is
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one
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 of the major reasons for
students
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 being more impacted academically by their peers.
For example
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, the
first
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time
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, when
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child
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a child
the child
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 gets
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to enroll
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enroll
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 in the school he/ she sees lots of similar aged group children there and that
sooths
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soothes
smooths
 the crying and
lonly
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lonely
only
 feeling of a
child
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.
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, he/she finds comfort with
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apply
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fellow
students
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 and starts sharing
feeling
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feelings
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 and making mutual bonds.
Moreover
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, it is seen that for
students
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 who have studious
friends
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, their
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academic
acedemic
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academic
 scores
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become
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becom e
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become
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 better every semester and for
students
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 who keep
friends
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 with
students
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 who don't pay attention to their
studies
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, their scores become considerably declined.
Secondly
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,
students
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 always try to imitate their fellows in
educational
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the educational
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program
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programs
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 if someone is getting higher grades and praise
by
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 the
teachers
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, so every other student wants to
do
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apply
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achieve the same.
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, my friend in school was a topper and I always did group
studies
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 with her and she always helped me like a mentor in
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 and
that is
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 the sole reason I got good results in final exams.
Teachers
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 only spend little
time
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 with
students
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, but
friends
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 help
one
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 another to study after class and help
one
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 another to solve issues regarding
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homework
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home work
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homework
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 or any test. In conclusion,
students
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 are more impacted by their peers in academic performance because they have mutual bonds and they are on the same level of
studies
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.
Teachers
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 can only give limited
time
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 to
students
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 and they have to teach
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a class
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class
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classes
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 full of
students
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, but
students
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 can help and learn from
one
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 another.
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