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It is argued that the most important thing for governments invest is education, and it is a popular opinion from people because the benefits such as short as long time are very relevant

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It is argued that the most important thing for
governments
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is
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education
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, and it is a popular opinion from
people
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 because the benefits
such
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 as short as
long
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 time are very relevant.
This
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 essay agrees that increase in
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 public resources
in
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student
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 population can make grow up the countries in several aspects. It is clear that
improve
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 the quality of
education
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in
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 all levels can enhance at
time
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 the quality of life for
the
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society, for that reason must be a very important decision for every
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governments
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 to dedicate a huge part of its funds
in
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this
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 aspect.
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, undoubtedly,
education
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 has given a radical approach to the
continues
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 improvement
in
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the
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people
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 as
a workers
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workers
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 in the real job world. When the community is better prepared to face different positions in any variety of companies, its performance increase significantly, and the functioning of
this
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 same company is going to improve considerably. Better workers achieve superior
productions
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 and more profits.
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,
whether
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if
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 the
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governments
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government
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does
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 not invest in
education
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, its own economy could be
curb
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,
reason
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 why the leaders must be weighed against the drawbacks of
spend
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 improperly the money. In my opinion,
good
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 percentage of public funds must be destinated
to
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on
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education
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,
thus
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 enable that
the
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people
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 have the option to learn more and more getting smartest day by day. In conclusion, if
governments
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 spend money
in
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on
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education
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, it can be available to everyone,
enhanced
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 each
aspects
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 of
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people
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people's
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 life, the
country
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country's
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 economy,
even
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and even
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 strengthen the presence of own
country
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country's
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 internationality.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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