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Some people think it is more important to spend money on roads and motorways than on public transport systems. To what extent do you agree?

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Building new
roads
 and motorways
instead
 of investing in public transportation is the most common idea in many countries. From my viewpoint, I think that the government should spend on both sides. On the one hand, there are several reasons why constructing
roads
 and lanes for motors is more practical.
To begin
 with, upgrading the quality of
roads
 can reduce the number of traffic problems. When
roads
 are widened, the number of traffic jams might decrease.
Also
, it is safer to drive on a high-quality and smooth road or motorway.
This
 means there will be fewer accidents.
Moreover
, using private road
transport
 is considered more convenient. Drivers can save a large
amount
 of time by using their own vehicles.
This
 is mainly because they do not have to depend on the schedule of trains or buses.
On the other hand
, investing in public transportation is
also
 necessary.
Firstly
, using public means of
transport
 can help protect the environment. When the number of vehicles declines, a substantial fall in the
amount
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 of emissions may be witnessed.
Additionally
, it is likely that the demand for fossil fuels will
also
 decrease.
Secondly
, travelling by public
transport
 can be economical.
In other words
, those who take buses or trains on a regular basis can save a considerable
amount
 of money.
For example
, in Vietnam, the expense to travel daily by bus is much lower than that of operating private vehicles
such
 as cars or motorbikes. In conclusion,
although
 diverting the budget to the construction and maintenance of the road system is essential, the government should allocate the same
amount
 of funds to public
transport
.
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