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Some people think it is more important to spend money on roads and motorways than on public transport systems. To what extent do you agree?

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Building new
roads
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 and motorways
instead
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 of investing in public transportation is the most common idea in many countries. From my viewpoint, I think that the government should spend on both sides. On the one hand, there are several reasons why constructing
roads
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 and lanes for motors is more practical.
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 with, upgrading the quality of
roads
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 can reduce the number of traffic problems. When
roads
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 are widened, the number of traffic jams might decrease.
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, it is safer to drive on a high-quality and smooth road or motorway.
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 means there will be fewer accidents.
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, using private road
transport
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 is considered more convenient. Drivers can save a large
amount
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 of time by using their own vehicles.
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 is mainly because they do not have to depend on the schedule of trains or buses.
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, investing in public transportation is
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 necessary.
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, using public means of
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 can help protect the environment. When the number of vehicles declines, a substantial fall in the
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amount
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 of emissions may be witnessed.
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, it is likely that the demand for fossil fuels will
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 decrease.
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, travelling by public
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 can be economical.
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, those who take buses or trains on a regular basis can save a considerable
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 of money.
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, in Vietnam, the expense to travel daily by bus is much lower than that of operating private vehicles
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 as cars or motorbikes. In conclusion,
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 diverting the budget to the construction and maintenance of the road system is essential, the government should allocate the same
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 of funds to public
transport
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Infrastructure
  • Transportation
  • Congestion
  • Economy
  • Carbon emissions
  • Pollution
  • Social inclusion
  • Urban development
  • Efficient
  • Investment
  • Reliance
  • Boosting
  • Affordable
  • Private vehicle users
  • Public transport system
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