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Multinational companies improve the quality of life in the foreign countries where they sell their goods. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

#companies #quality #life #countries #goods
Nowadays universal
companies
 are established in small cities as well. In fact, I agree that
MNCs
 enhance the
quality
 of living abroad where they trade their
products
 as they produce durable
products
 and they provide better jobs to the local
job
 seekers.
Firstly
, International
companies
 can produce
products
with
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 good
quality
.
In other words
, those
products
 are durable and
people
 can use them for many years without any complaints.
For Example
,
people
 in my country prefer to purchase
products
of
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from
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 TATA or Reliance
companies
 due to their reliable
quality
 of the goods.
As a result
,
people
 who use these
products
 can feel comfortable and
also
 they can avoid
to visit
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 service
centers
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 multiple times for the repairs of the
products
 as
products
 of these
mncs
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MNCs
 are durable, they don't break or give trouble very often unlike
products
 which are made in small scale industries.
Secondly
, Global
companies
 can provide good
job
 opportunities to
the
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employment seekers
of
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 that area. To put it in another way, Usually, The jobs of
MNCs
 are
high paying
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 jobs in the
job
 market. Not only do they pay high salaries. but they
also
 give additional benefits to their workforce.
As a result
, Which indirectly helps to change the livelihood of the
people
 of that region as it indirectly helps to grow the transportation industry, food production industry and local
small scale
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 shops
also
. To sum up, Not only do
MNCs
 provide better
job
 opportunities, but they
also
 produce good
quality
 things.
Therefore
, I agree that big corporate
companies
 help to excel
the
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 lifestyle abroad where they purchase their objects.
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