Some people believe they should keep all the money they have earned andshold not pay tax to the state. Do you agree and disagree?

Taxes is one of the most important national income in many countries. Some
people
believe that saving
money
is better than paying
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taxes to the government. I am
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disagree with them that what
i
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am going to explain in
this
essay.
People
should pay
money
to the state for many reasons. One of the main reasons that
this
money
is spent on improving
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essential
essintial
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essential
services like
public
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health sector, education and transport.
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, in the
last
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corona
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pandemic
pandamic
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pandemic
where
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many countries were suffering because of complex economical
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, other countries
hinges
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on
money
taken
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form
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people
in
this
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urgent
urget
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urgent
situation which help them to pass
this
period safely. It can be seen that
money
that
people
paid for taxes
replaced
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by fundamental public services
people
can not live without.
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paying
money
to the community has a serious effect on
the
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public mental health.
Although
keeping
money
makes
people
feel
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, they become less responsible toward society and they do not care
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a lot
alot
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a lot
about country safety.
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, If you want to improve the building of your apartment, who will be
the
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responsible
resposible
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responsible
about
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that you only or all
people
with you in the same building
?.
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So not only the governments are responsible
about
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progress but
also
the whole society, individuals and organisations. In
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conclusion
conclusoion
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, paying
money
to the government has a huge positive impact on supporting
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essential
essintial
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essential
public services and grow up responsible
people
toward
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their community which will benefit you
at
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the end.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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