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Recent surveys show increased interest in relocation and travel to other countries. What may be the reasons for this trend, and what will be the possible outcome from this behavior? Provide examples for your opinion.

#surveys #show #interest #relocation #travel #countries #trend #outcome #behavior
Computers
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 technology becoming more and more popular every day. Metamodernism is growing, which is related with help the rapid development of the world, and we must obey
to
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him, as we accepted
another social revolutions
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another social revolution
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. Computers
hunts
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 us everywhere, even in education. Nowadays, many exams are
taking
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 online,
many
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and many
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 courses
for
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 self-development in virtual formats. I mean, that people will soon like
this
 and we will go into global digitalisation. Of course,
computer
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computers
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 have large variations
pluses
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 and minuses and each of them
subjective
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:
someone
 is making
many
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money
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in
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internet
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,
someone
 is just playing
video-games
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,
someone
 studying,
someone
 is scapegrace - and everyone is right, because it is inevitable
,
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 because art is much stronger
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 than man. The only thing worth worrying about is that
illusoryness
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illusoriness
illusiveness
 can
finally
 capture us and we will have to say goodbye to the past and destroy the old world in order to build a new one. The new world will be more attractive and more addictive, it is automatism can kill the concept of “human”
,
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 because the code will decide our fate, not us.
Consequently
, a red line should
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 be drawn in education, where automation should not go, so that people are “not from test tubes”. We have kept
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 under control
this
 system and it can collapse at any moment, and it is really scary.
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