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Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Believed by some folks, that the administrators of universities have to enrol the same number of
students
 of each gender in every course. I partially agree with
this
 opinion due to the reasons which will be discussed in the following paragraphs. On the one hand, a class with equal numbers of women and men would help them to find friends easily.
For instance
, if a girl feels more comfortable with a person of the same gender, she will make friends with no difficulties.
Moreover
, some other
students
 may want to improve their communication through society, and
this
 would be effectively useful for them.
Furthermore
,
this
 classroom keeps a motivated atmosphere which is beneficial for everyone including the professor.
On the other hand
, in some subjects
such
 as nursing and architectural engineering, there would be mostly women volunteers who want to study in that course. So, if there will be just one boy among 9 girls in an architecture class, he will feel uncomfortable and the classroom will be mind-numbing for him.
However
, there are some universities in Iran, Al Zahra, that enrol only girls. But in my opinion, not only it is useless, but
also
 it doesn't let the
students
 become in society and become extroverted with the other genders.
In addition
, some people who study in universities like
this
 may have problems in their marriage in the future and
that is
 one of the disadvantages of separate-gender colleges. As discussed in the above paragraphs, I partially agree with the idea that colleges must get
students
 from both types of genders equally in each study.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gender diversity
  • fostering innovation
  • educational experience
  • enforcing gender quotas
  • merit and potential
  • individual achievements
  • natural differences
  • gender equality
  • reducing gender stereotypes
  • balanced workforce
  • traditionally male-dominated or female-dominated fields
  • fluctuating applicant numbers
  • compromise on quality
  • diversity aspects
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