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Some people think that children should follow their parent’s advice, however, others disagree. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Individuals think that kids should follow the guidance of their
parents
, while others believe that does not agree with
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. In
this
 should discuss both sides and give your personal point of view.
To begin
 with, some
people
 think that
children
 should follow their parent's suggestion. because
parents
 consider to more experience rather than their kid.
In other words
,
parents
 know how to handle different situations with experience.
For instance
, My aunty always says that always take
advice
 from your
parents
 because they have been through all the situations and they are so experienced.
Furthermore
,
people
 believe that kids should follow their parent's
advice
.
parents
 are only the ones who can suggest
on
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different topics without judging.
In other words
, they can give brilliant
advice
 about sexual life and financial issues without even judging you.
On the other hand
, some
people
 think that
parents
 are not the ideal choice for taking guidance.
people
 who disagree with the
statement
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because
ofbecause
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because
of because
 lack of confidence among the kid in front of their
parents
.
In other words
,
kid
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the kid
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 cannot generate their message or ask anything from
parents
 because there is
confidence
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 in themself.
For example
, when I got passed in IELTS, I was really confused while choosing the country because I am not confident to talk about the pro and cons of Canada.
Moreover
,
people
 who totally disagree with the
statement
.
Children
 cannot ask anything about social media networking websites because
parents
does
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 not enough knowledge about their virtual world. to sum up, some
people
 think that
children
 should take all the
advice
 from their
parents
. whilst other
people
 completely disagree with the
statement
. In my opinion,
parents
 are not the ideal person to take suggestions. because
majority
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the majority
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 of
children
 lack confidence and
parents
 do not knowledge about modern problems.
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