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Some people believe that the best way to control accidents on city streets is to lower the speed limit, but others think there are better ways to improve the safety on city streets. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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nowadays,
accident
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 becomes the issue of the century for
community
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. some
people
 think that the ideal
way
 to reduce accidents on
city
 roads is to reduce the speed limit, but others believe
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that
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that
 there is
better
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way
 to work on their
safety
 on
city
streets
.
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this
 should discuss both sides and provide your personal point of view.
To begin
 with, some
people
 think that
ideal
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way
 to reduce
the
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accident
 to give specific speed limits.
Firstly
, automatic cars can
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efficient
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 and
easily
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to control
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 less speed on street.
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, if the speed is around 40km, so it easily to
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the automatic
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vehicle
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vehicles
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 on roads.
For instance
, I am driving cars with my friend, so it
easily
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 to handle the car
on
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 less speed.
Furthermore
, I would like to outline more one impact which can reduce
accident
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accidents
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 by less speed limit on roads. it
easily
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 to focus all the angles of
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 less speed and it
cause
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 the less
accident
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streets
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the streets
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.
For example
, when I was learning
a
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car in
start
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, so I drive the car
on
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 20km which help to look
the
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 side mirrors.
On the other hand
, some
people
 argue that there
are
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better
way
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 to produce
the
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safety
 on
city
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a city
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street
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.
secondly
, engineers
have
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 look after the build
such
 a speed breaker
to
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safety
 on
streets
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.
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, engineers have to plan something while building the
streets
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how can
they
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can give perfect
safety
 to
public
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.
For example
, In Islamabad, after every 2
kilometers
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, they build the speed breaker for
the
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safety
. Moving
further
,
people
 believe that there is best to improve
the
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safety
on
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city
streets
.
government
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 have to make big
billboard
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 on road to guide the instructions of driving.
Lastly
, some
people
 think that the perfect
way
 to control
the
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accident
on
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city
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the city
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 is to set the speed limit. other think that they should improve their
safety
 ln
city
streets
. In my opinion, the best to improve their
safety
 on
city
streets
. because they can make speed
breaker
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after
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every 2
kilometer
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 and
big
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a big
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billboard
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billboards
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 on street to guide
on
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them on
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the
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apply
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safety
.
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